Incorporate feedback from your instructor, peers, and your own ongoing learning


Incorporate feedback from your instructor, peers, and your own ongoing learning in order to polish and refine your Abstract. The checklist and rubric is the similar to the one you used for your Abstract draft, except that it includes criteria for incorporating feedback from your instructor and peers.
prof feedback: Good work on this assignment. In terms of your aims, you want to be a little more specific when you use phrases such as “watching media”. You want to specificaly identify the harmful media source and content if you are going to measure this properly. You also do not really explain what your goal is here. What I get from this is something like “tell everyone watching violence makes you more violent and if you do not watch violence you will never be violent”. I am not sure if this is your exact position but this is how it reads from this aims section, which is not really practical when considering how new violent media is in terms of its interaction with the majority of humans. This assignment is more about your plans on how you would test a hypothesis, but you mostly wrote about the implications of results yet to be obtained, rather than focusing on the actual experiment. For the final draft, consider how you would want to test this idea rather than why, and change your aims to reflect this. Anything that has to do with the “why” should go in the significance section. Let me know if you have any questions on this. Great job!


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